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Post by the lonely soldier 714 on Apr 17, 2008 11:56:30 GMT -5
these are my poems, some of them may have strong lanaguages and sort therefore some should take action and read at your own risk.
my mixed feelings.
why am i not trusted? i am the guy who never causes trouble, her parents don't even trust me. i didn't do anything wrong i love their lone daughter so much so why can't they even trust me? she trusts me for my life, why must you think about meting me? in public area, it's more safer i won't cause any harm-i'm with my mom you be their with your daughter. is it because i look like that guy who raped my love cause i really look like nothing of him, is it because i'm not the one becaue you broke us apart, you are wrong we love each other to death and i mean no harm.
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Post by thapunkpred15 on Apr 17, 2008 21:52:54 GMT -5
Its fine the way it is. Its good. A poem is all about expressing yourself and thats what you did.
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Post by spearheart on Apr 17, 2008 22:01:28 GMT -5
Oh wow this is deep man. I'm sorry that this happend to you. Very good poem very touching.
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Post by the lonely soldier 714 on Apr 18, 2008 9:38:49 GMT -5
thanks, thats what it's all about. and love some times their gory if i wanted gory. this another one i made up it's called the same saturday
it's saturday again, she isn't available so what can i do? playing my games is the same it's kinda dull doing this all day. could she be on the computer, oh wait-i got no password to get on. who can i call? jesse mac is at work, steve'o is with his gir (the lucky bastart) could i walk? no. i'm too lazy to get up. why must my plans to me her be ruin on a saturday? this is so gay. i'll kill the weather man for this sh*t it's raining again, she got a cold this is getting really old.
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Post by spearheart on Apr 18, 2008 19:10:22 GMT -5
Very good and they are filled with how you feel. Great job on your poems. LOL and the part with the weather man LOL so true.
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Post by the lonely soldier 714 on Apr 22, 2008 9:35:42 GMT -5
yeah. it is.
on my own again.
she cheated, i've been used. the same why i been used long times ago. you could of told me, why keep it from me. now your engaged, he's going to war and left me all alone. it's hard to get over you and when i say it's hard it's true. i thought we where goin to go though the hard times no how hard it was for me to meet you. damnit devon i love you, you say you love me too what the f--k your engaged and ur now telling me you might be pregnet if it's true, the the baby is going to be a bastart you fiance is not going to last in the war just come back to me, come back to me please...but 4 months is long i hope your not having him get you laid and ready to birth when your fiance goes to war. it breaks my heart more then you broke. why didn't you tell me....now i'm on my own.
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Post by Adara on Apr 22, 2008 10:12:21 GMT -5
Please, make sure to put a warning at the beginning stating your Poems will contain strong language.
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Post by thapunkpred15 on Apr 22, 2008 10:15:44 GMT -5
Please, make sure to put a warning at the beginning stating your Poems will contain strong language. Oh wow great job at cracking down....... |
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Post by Adara on Apr 22, 2008 10:26:48 GMT -5
Please, make sure to put a warning at the beginning stating your Poems will contain strong language. Oh wow great job at cracking down....... You know, I've had about enough of your lip. Consider this your second warning. |
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Post by evildragon37 on Apr 22, 2008 19:27:48 GMT -5
Hmm not bad. Has alot of feelin' in it. It's sad and I'm guessing this is nonfiction poem?
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Post by the lonely soldier 714 on Apr 23, 2008 6:38:12 GMT -5
Hmm not bad. Has alot of feelin' in it. It's sad and I'm guessing this is nonfiction poem? no. there based on my feelings, i express them anyway i can. and sorry for not mentioning the language, ada. i didn't know about it was a factory to put it down and i should of done it anyway. |
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Post by Adara on Apr 23, 2008 7:13:44 GMT -5
Thank you very much for amending that Soldier. I knew you weren't aware, which is why I PMed you.  Thanks again. |
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Post by the lonely soldier 714 on Apr 23, 2008 9:16:57 GMT -5
mhm!  this next one is called hope. hope i hope you come back to me. i hope you understand me i hope you love me more then your other man i hope you can let me hold your hand in the puring rain. i hope we met i hope we get married i hope for everthing you could imaging. i hope you leave him for me when he goes to war i hope he won't come back and leave me to be with you... |
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Post by spearheart on Apr 23, 2008 19:55:23 GMT -5
 aww dude. Your like hurt bad huh? Well your poems are really good and are screaming your feelings. I hope you get to be happy soon. Again good poems.
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Post by the lonely soldier 714 on Apr 24, 2008 6:40:35 GMT -5
yea well here's the thing she's going out wit me and she's engaged wit some as well. he's going to war in Iraq, and...*sighs* it's complicated to tell you the truth.
this one is called...
normal feelings in the old days.
it's like always when we where young. our feelings are normal making us feel hole again. although i wish it was just me, we're still entaminly in love. they where the old days. you cry over the phone and we keep promises that you know i'll keep. it makes me hole and makes me right when some thing is wrong i make you smile when i sing our song. like the old days. everything seems normal. i won't let our love ever die and if he gone in this endless fight in war, you'll still have me and i'll do my best this time. i won't leave you ever.
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