Post by bloodedyautja on Apr 25, 2007 14:33:55 GMT -5
ok in english we were asked to write a small horror story I got a really good mark and decided it wouldn't be to difficult for me to expand it into a book. so heres the bit that would go on the back of the book and the prologue and intro (yes you cna have both). any opinions on it would be appreciated.
The Blurb:
The Fallen Angels a group of kids with parents who don’t love them-a place where they can meet and feel in place- their meeting place? An old house that no one but them know about. The dares give them confidence until one dare starts somethings not even their strength can stop. A room that’s been unopened for over 100 years that they’ve always felt uncomfortable about gets opened. A curse released- their families and friends dying in front of them- they can’t tell anyone-who’d believe them?
Who’d believe the truth?
THE STORY
Intro:
My friends and I always dared each other to do things it gave us confidence (something we needed in our lives). But one day a dare went too far. I wish I’d never accepted. I will tell my story but only if you dare not speak of it.
Prologue:- Present
We always met up together. We were like family and only had each other. All our parents rejected us in different ways. Tom, just 14 his mother’s an alcoholic, too drunk to care for him since he was ten (when his father walked out on them). He joined us the Fallen Angels at twelve. Alice she’s 17 her Dad’s a drug user and as he puts it someones ‘money accountant’ she’s the second oldest of us and the founder of our…….society. She found this house when she was 9 when she ran from her father as he chased her down the garden with a knife during one of his drunken rages. The group was made when she was ten after meeting someone in her class who also had a father with ‘problems’. That girl got lucky her father sought help and she left after two years ( a month after I’d joined).
Me? My names Jessica but ever one calls me Jess. I’m 15 and only have my uncle who’s one life support; he’s the only family I have left now. After what has happened.
There was about 20 of us from 12 to 18 the name Fallen Angels was made just after I’d joined 5 years ago. Why this name? Because we were all once normal children. with normal families….normal lives. We were happy. Like angels in heaven. But, like some angels in heaven some of us fell away from that happiness….that…normality into the hellish cauldron of difficulties we now have to get through everyday.
The room was locked when Alice found the house (our meeting place). It had been locked for around a century. We didn’t know why then but we knew there was something different about that room. Something evil. Whenever one of us walked past it a chill would sweep over us and an invisible hand would grip our throat making us freeze and our hairs stand on end. making us hurry past. Sometimes we heard people running in there. Yet despite or curiosity we did not open it. None of us knew why then it was just a sense. Now the few of us left know we shouldn’t have. We were right to fear it.
6 months ago we decided to open the room praying it was as empty as the rest of the house. If we had known how our prayers would be answered we wouldn’t have bothered.
It was Peter (14) who suggested that we open it. But most of us knew better but no-one ever turned down a dear and he knew it. Alice though second oldest was more mature and said no. But when everyone persisted she made us draw straws so that 4 of us would go up together. In the end me, Tom, Vicky and Michael were choosen to go up there. As we approached the door the familiar sickening coldness swept over us chilling us to the soul.
Michael as the strongewst held the axe, blunt and rusty ready to cut open the door. As he raised the axe a scream echoed from the room. It stopped as abrubtedly as it came leaving us all shaken. He swung the axe at the door embedding it in the ancient wood with a dull thunk. Again and again he swung until the splintered remains swung open on ancient hinges with a creak At the sight of what lay within I screamed and it became worse till al hell was revealed.
well thats the start I'll try to put chapter one on as it comes together. please appreciate the chapter might be in sections in line with the develpoment but I'll try to keep posting it as the book develops if anyone finds this bit intresting.
The Blurb:
The Fallen Angels a group of kids with parents who don’t love them-a place where they can meet and feel in place- their meeting place? An old house that no one but them know about. The dares give them confidence until one dare starts somethings not even their strength can stop. A room that’s been unopened for over 100 years that they’ve always felt uncomfortable about gets opened. A curse released- their families and friends dying in front of them- they can’t tell anyone-who’d believe them?
Who’d believe the truth?
THE STORY
Intro:
My friends and I always dared each other to do things it gave us confidence (something we needed in our lives). But one day a dare went too far. I wish I’d never accepted. I will tell my story but only if you dare not speak of it.
Prologue:- Present
We always met up together. We were like family and only had each other. All our parents rejected us in different ways. Tom, just 14 his mother’s an alcoholic, too drunk to care for him since he was ten (when his father walked out on them). He joined us the Fallen Angels at twelve. Alice she’s 17 her Dad’s a drug user and as he puts it someones ‘money accountant’ she’s the second oldest of us and the founder of our…….society. She found this house when she was 9 when she ran from her father as he chased her down the garden with a knife during one of his drunken rages. The group was made when she was ten after meeting someone in her class who also had a father with ‘problems’. That girl got lucky her father sought help and she left after two years ( a month after I’d joined).
Me? My names Jessica but ever one calls me Jess. I’m 15 and only have my uncle who’s one life support; he’s the only family I have left now. After what has happened.
There was about 20 of us from 12 to 18 the name Fallen Angels was made just after I’d joined 5 years ago. Why this name? Because we were all once normal children. with normal families….normal lives. We were happy. Like angels in heaven. But, like some angels in heaven some of us fell away from that happiness….that…normality into the hellish cauldron of difficulties we now have to get through everyday.
The room was locked when Alice found the house (our meeting place). It had been locked for around a century. We didn’t know why then but we knew there was something different about that room. Something evil. Whenever one of us walked past it a chill would sweep over us and an invisible hand would grip our throat making us freeze and our hairs stand on end. making us hurry past. Sometimes we heard people running in there. Yet despite or curiosity we did not open it. None of us knew why then it was just a sense. Now the few of us left know we shouldn’t have. We were right to fear it.
6 months ago we decided to open the room praying it was as empty as the rest of the house. If we had known how our prayers would be answered we wouldn’t have bothered.
It was Peter (14) who suggested that we open it. But most of us knew better but no-one ever turned down a dear and he knew it. Alice though second oldest was more mature and said no. But when everyone persisted she made us draw straws so that 4 of us would go up together. In the end me, Tom, Vicky and Michael were choosen to go up there. As we approached the door the familiar sickening coldness swept over us chilling us to the soul.
Michael as the strongewst held the axe, blunt and rusty ready to cut open the door. As he raised the axe a scream echoed from the room. It stopped as abrubtedly as it came leaving us all shaken. He swung the axe at the door embedding it in the ancient wood with a dull thunk. Again and again he swung until the splintered remains swung open on ancient hinges with a creak At the sight of what lay within I screamed and it became worse till al hell was revealed.
well thats the start I'll try to put chapter one on as it comes together. please appreciate the chapter might be in sections in line with the develpoment but I'll try to keep posting it as the book develops if anyone finds this bit intresting.
